09-27-2019, 03:13 AM
Uhm. I'm not following the answer to the shard plotline question. I think that needs a bit of work. That doesn't tell me anything about how he will fit into/help drive the story.
The backstory also needs a bit more expansion, and perhaps be framed as a story? Among other things, we need a feel for *why* a character is here, ICly speaking, between these two questions.
The backstory also needs a bit more expansion, and perhaps be framed as a story? Among other things, we need a feel for *why* a character is here, ICly speaking, between these two questions.